Admittedly, I wrote this about two years ago, when I wasn’t doing too well with women. I’ll put up a couple of other stories from the same period next week - it’s true that the female characters suffer a lot, now that I think about it.

Thanks for feedback, anyway - that goes for Mr Russell as well!

Once again you show what magnitude of a woman hater you are. No more sweet inuit love for me? Then burn in hell, you frigid bitch! Whammo! Lantern to the head! I’m burning your head to a blackened cinder to show that you never understood how deep my caring love really was, you ice monster.

For the rhino comedy value, Esa

These short pieces don’t really work for me, as I can’t really get a feeling the story is going anywhere, and I ‘m still not doing style criticism but goddamit I think you are getting somewhere. Nice visual style, as someone said.

My only problem with this story is that it is written in second and I find that distracting. I would hope that you keep up the use of vivid language in all your other work.